North wind blows my face.
Wet snow stings and cuts my fur.
I’m ready for Spring.
Note: This is a Haiku (my first, actually!). And since I’m not a poet, I’m open to any constructive criticism you experts might offer.
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Musings by an ND Domer's Mom 
A fabulous haiku! Having no talent for poetry, all I can offer you is that this sure is a lot better than I could do! Most impressive, dear friend.
Bless you for your lovely words, Lucy! They bolster my confidence, you know. And my guess is, you could write excellent poetry…you have a way with words!
I speak only the truth, of course! Believe me when I say my poetry is pretty bad. If I am feeling brave one day I shall work some into the blog and you can all have a good giggle about it!
I won’t giggle…promise! Unless, of course, you write something that’s meant to be funny. What I know of poetry wouldn’t fill a thimble!
I think he probably is. Well done! You should go and catch him, i say!
Always wanted a bunny, Professor (how did you know??) Of course, the poor thing would spend his days terrorized by a Sheltie who would alternate between wanting to play with him and wanting to herd him into corners!
*laughs* Yes…but I bet they could make great friends!!
You know I’ve never written a Haiku, but this sounds good to me! I’m guessing Dallas was indoors during this photo shoot… 😄 And you ARE a poet, Debbie!
Aw, shucks, DD…thanks! That’s a very high compliment coming from you, and I do appreciate it! Yes, Dallas was standing beside me when I took this photo, and it was all I could do to keep him from barking and scaring Bunny away.
This is an “as I understand it” comment. With a haiku, action and descriptive words take precedence over conjunctions, prepositions, and such. So, instead of “Wet snow stings and cuts my fur,” you might consider “Wet snow stings, cutting my fur.”
Beyond that, it’s a really sweet take on a cold little bunny. Did you bring him in for a warm carrot and some playtime with Dallas?
I truly appreciate your helpful suggestion, Linda. You know, I must have been day-dreaming when the poetry portions of literature classes were being discussed, ha! I’d have never thought of omitting the conjunction and using a gerund, but it works.
I felt sorry for the poor bunny. He looked like he needed food and a warm place to hole up. Dallas was watching him like a hawk, but no way would I bring him inside! If I had, the poor dear would have found that being cold was the least of his worries.
Would you like to know something funny? I had to look up “gerund.”
No, you didn’t!! Ah, well, just call me a grammar nerd (probably because of all those sentences the nuns had us diagram!)
Precious little fellow and you make me feel his plight 😉 I supply my backyard bunnies with apples throughout the winter to help them through. gives me a chance to watch them and Smile 😉
I would do that, too, Morgan, if my Sheltie wouldn’t beat them to the food! Thanks for stopping by and for your oh-so-kind words!
LOL silly puppy 🙂 ❤
He LOVES apples, Morgan. The problem is, he loves doughnuts more!!
LOL I put cat food out for the resident strays and, invariably, my own cat will dash out to eat theirs rather than his own. silly, but I guess we are very much the same way in nature 😉
Love the poem and the funny bunny!
Thanks, Cindy. He was very cute and didn’t seem to mind posing for me!
Poor little rabbit! You should knit him a little coat and boots! All I know about haikus is that they’re supposed to have seventeen syllables – spot on! 😉 But much more importantly it’s a sweet little poem that sets the pic off beautifully…
Thanks, FF — glad I nailed the 17-syllable requirement! I know — isn’t this the sweetest little bunny? Dallas was beside himself, barking through the window, but Bunny ignored him. I imagine he’d look really cute in a little woolen coat and boots! He was actually looking at another bunny farther out in the yard, but I couldn’t get them together in the picture.
So cute and so cold.
I’m sure he was, John. Poor little thing — one would think he’d hibernate or something, huh?!
You would think.
I write mainly haiku on my poetry blog. I love your haiku. I think we are all ready for spring…that sweet little bunny!
Since you write haiku, you know how hard that form of poetry is, Suzi. For you to say I did okay means a lot to me! Thanks — and Spring can’t come soon enough for me!
Debbie, what a fabulous photo capture of the bunny. OMG…he/she is so CUTE! And you haiku is stellar! I have such an affection for rabbits. To me they are so adorable and cuddly. When I was a kid, I had several bunnies.
Have a super week, my friend! And thanks for the cuteness today 🙂
X
You had bunnies, Ron?? I’m just pea-green over that! I’ve long wanted a bunny for a pet, but of course, having a dog — even a gentle one like Dallas — sort of precludes that. Dallas would drive the little guy NUTS!
Thanks for enjoying my maiden efforts at haiku. It’s harder than it looks, ha! Have a fabulous week, my friend! xo
Oh she’s so cute. And so brave. And so patient. What a sweet capture.
Aw, thanks, Barb! It was a sweet-looking bunny…but looked oh so cold!!
awww, he is gorgeous!!!!!
He was…cold, too! xxx